Progress should be the aim of any great society. People too
often cling unnecessarily to obsolete ways of thinking and
acting because they enjoy feeling comfortable and fear the
unknown
The argument that improved academic training, in the form of required credits in
education and psychology, will substantially alleviate the problem of poorly
performing teachers may seem logical at first glance. However, the author relies
on unsupported assumptions about what kind of development teachers need and
mechanisms for replacing poor teachers with newly certified teachers. Therefore,
the argument is fundamentally flawed and unconvincing.
First, the writer assumes that the required courses will produce better teachers.
In fact, the courses might be entirely irrelevant to the teachers’ failings. Suppose,
for example, that the main problem lies in cultural and linguistic misunderstandings
between teachers and students; graduate-level courses that do not address
these issues would be of little use in bridging these gaps and improving educational
outcomes. Furthermore, the writer assumes that poorly performing teachers
have not already taken these courses. If the state's teachers have already
undergone such training but still fail to serve their students, then requiring them
to take the classes again is unlikely to address the problem. In fact, the writer
establishes no correlation between the teachers' classroom performance and
their academic coursework.
Additionally, the writer provides no evidence that poorly performing teachers who
are already certified will either stop teaching or will undergo additional training. In
its current form, the argument implies that only teachers seeking certification,
who may or may not be teachers already in the system, will receive the specified
training. Furthermore, the author fails to establish a link between becoming
certified and actually being hired in the public school system. If school systems
have budget shortfalls and institute a hiring freeze, then newly certified teachers
may not enter classrooms for quite some time. Unless there is a way to transition
poor teachers out of the classroom and ensure teachers with proper training are
soon hired, the bright future the writer envisions may be decades away.
The notion that the specified coursework will create better teachers would be
strengthened by evidence that the training will address barriers to educating
students. For example, if a state with similar demographics had implemented
similar guidelines and then seen either improved learning as measured by
standardized tests or improved teaching as documented by teacher observations,
then one could conclude with more confidence that the guidelines should be
implemented in this state. Also, the author would be considerably more persuasive
if she showed that a plan is in place to either require all teachers to gain this
certification or terminate poor performers without the certification. The author
should also demonstrate that the public schools have the budgets to hire newly
certified teachers so they can begin to have an effect on students.
In conclusion, the writer is not necessarily mistaken in stating that the state’s
comprehensive guidelines will lead to improvement in educational outcomes in
public schools. After all, the additional training would probably not adversely
affect classroom performance. However, to support the assertion that the
guidelines will effectively solve the state’s problem, the writer must first define
the scope of the problem more clearly and submit more conclusive evidence that
the new requirements will, in fact, improve overall teaching performance. Without
such evidence, stakeholders in the public school system, including parents,
administrators, and legislators, should be skeptical that education will improve
anytime soon.
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- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 65
- The city council of Smithville has recommended makingchanges to police procedures to improve the visibility of thepolice force. These changes include hiring more police officers,budgeting more funds for police overtime, and directingofficers to patrol sig 63
- Progress should be the aim of any great society. People toooften cling unnecessarily to obsolete ways of thinking andacting because they enjoy feeling comfortable and fear theunknown 16
- Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and to disobey andresist unjust laws. 50
- The following appeared in the City Council Proceedingssection of the local newspaper in Smithville.“The city council of Smithville has recommended makingchanges to police procedures to improve the visibility of thepolice force. These changes include hir 16
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...skeptical that education will improve anytime soon.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, after all, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 28.0 12.9520958084 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3278.0 2260.96107784 145% => OK
No of words: 544.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 6.02573529412 5.12650576532 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82947280553 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03997602513 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 204.123752495 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503676470588 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 950.4 705.55239521 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 19.0 8.76447105788 217% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.22255489022 284% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.5093993634 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.0 119.503703932 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7272727273 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.45454545455 5.70786347227 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 47.0 5.15768463074 911% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 23.0 5.25449101796 438% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0416852399243 0.218282227539 19% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0152554922939 0.0743258471296 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.018315277303 0.0701772020484 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0106976454135 0.128457276422 8% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0201075719899 0.0628817314937 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 14.3799401198 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.99 12.5979740519 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 155.0 98.500998004 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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