Progress should be the aim of any great society. People too
often cling unnecessarily to obsolete ways of thinking and
acting because they enjoy feeling comfortable and fear the
unknown
Every society ought to strive for progress and avoid stagnation. Humans by nature fear and resist change. We tend to over-delude our-self with the safety of status quo while trying to resist any change to it. In my case , when there are holidays for long duration I tend to skip college when the classes finally start. It is also evident when we have to learn to new things but the fear of failure keeps us from trying altogether.
A stagnant society would not be a happy one. Evolution has shaped our mind and body to face new challenges. In the absence of these our mind grows dull and body becomes inactive. Depression in modern day is a good example. Basic needs like obtaining food, shelter and basic survival made trivial has led to a lack of enough challenges for our mind and body. Depression is merely a response to this vacuum of challenges. Even on a societal level this hold true, if a society does not have challenges and strive for progress it goes in to 'depression'.
Stagnation in a society eats away at its core values and leaves behind an emotionless, boring place. This can be seen at the individual level too. When we don't have new challenges to face we become emotionless and dead on the inside. People are meant have constant challenges in life to progress. In the same way, a society needs to face newer and newer challenges to progress.
Thus, every society needs to strive to reach newer heights, moving on from the past and present while not fearing future.
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| 2019-09-06 | Sushanth Reddy | 16 | view |
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Suggestion:
...sist any change to it. In my case , when there are holidays for long duration I t...
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...ong duration I tend to skip college when the classes finally start. It is also ev...
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...s finally start. It is also evident when we have to learn to new things but the f...
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Message: Did you mean 'progressing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: progressing
...eeds to face newer and newer challenges to progress. Thus, every society needs to str...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, thus, while, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1235.0 2235.4752809 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 265.0 442.535393258 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66037735849 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47043688401 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577358490566 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 389.7 704.065955056 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3921387659 60.3974514979 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.6111111111 118.986275619 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.7222222222 23.4991977007 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 5.21951772744 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0717839380001 0.243740707755 29% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0250679994479 0.0831039109588 30% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0267626923238 0.0758088955206 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0430180449432 0.150359130593 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183185313018 0.0667264976115 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 14.1392134831 56% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.16 12.1639044944 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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