Childrens should take part time job in their free time or they should totally focus on their studies . What are the advantages and disadvantages to children of doing so ?
Some people say that students should have do part time jobs with their studies . In this way they get working experience and money which is useful for their future . Whereas some masses advocate that pupils merely concentrate on their studies . But I contended that a children perform well if he or she doing both things . Merits and demerits relating to both given aspects would be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs with my own perspective.
On the one hand , learners have to work in their leisure hours . Pupil get experience of working environment in advance if they are doing part time job side by side studies . After completion of studies they easily get a better job if they have experience . But it has also few disadvantage , students in their early stage start working loose concentration from education consequently they drop it without completing them .
On the other hand , some masses believed that learners should only focus on their education . childrens do Studies with more focus and Concentration achieve deep knowledge of subjects later become professional and experts . It has some drawbacks , after completion of education studies they have to do more efforts to get a average level job . Because lack of experience no one ready to pay high wages to fresher.
To recapitulate , I contended that a children grow well if he have good educational background with working experience . It's also great when they are work in those fields which related with their studies educational courses.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, so, well, whereas, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1264.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 245.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15918367347 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78516134375 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567346938776 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 387.0 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.8149212194 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.2666666667 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3333333333 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 5.01903807615 598% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324221387016 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114332823691 0.084324248473 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824203892417 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205203480856 0.151304729494 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616818667388 0.056905535591 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.