City where we live is a very important part of our lives. It where we spend most of our life and where we get good opportuities to build up our personality. Some people I'm sure would agree that spending most of our lives in one place is much better than moving in different places. Others would disagree. In my view, it is better to move in search of another place for two imperative reasons.
To begin with, moving to another place would benefit to person to get a good life. In order to live in a good comunity, we should seek from one area to other till we can find a good community, house, and even schools. Take myself as an example, three years ago, I lived in an apartment and it was so small to us since we have three kids. In fact, they didn't have chance to play outdoor for the community was so bad. Actually, the people were very bad because they unemployed and most of them were addicted on drugs, so this was really bad community to my children to grow there. My husband and I had decided to move to south of the town because there were educated people, besides there were a lot of outdoor sport close the area. When we moved, surprisingly, we bought a big house and the community was amazing compared to old one. My children got good friends and I got good nieghbor which was very friendly. If we would stay in the same place, we wouldn't had this opportunity to get a good life. As we can clearly see, my life got better with moving.
Hence, in addition to community, by relocating, we will get chance to get new experiences and job. When the person change his place, he wil discover new opportunities to learn something new such as language, job, colleague, friends and even new atmosphere. For instance, in the previous example, when we had moved to the new house, I found a new job since I worked in a company that it didn't give a good salary, but I worked with a new company that gave a lot of ideas and mony. I definitely flourished and I thought a new plan from the new company, as a result I opened my own business that really encouraged me and pushed me to earn money. I can't deny this benefit from moving since it really helped me a lot to thrived. This experience taught me that we should t alter our place to gain knoweledge and attain experiences.
By the way of conclusion, based on the argument above, I concur to move from plce to another till find the best one then we can settle and live in a good life with our family, freinds, and colleagues. We should think one day to change our house to ensure to live in a bright community.
Hi sir, I took the test last
Hi sir, I took the test last Friday but I didn't do well because I was so nervous and stressed. I think I didn't well in speaking I don't know what to do. I'm trying to study again. I'm really frustrated
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It where we spend most of our life
It is where we spend most of our life
they didn't have chance to play outdoor for the community was so bad
they didn't have chance to play outdoor because the community was so bad
so this was really bad community
so this was a really bad community
When the person change his place
When the person changes his place
it really helped me a lot to thrived
it really helped me a lot to be thrived
because they unemployed
because they are unemployed
the community was amazing compared to old one.
the community was amazing compared to the old one.
Sentence: It where we spend most of our life and where we get good opportuities to build up our personality.
Error: opportuities Suggestion: opportunities
Sentence: In order to live in a good comunity, we should seek from one area to other till we can find a good community, house, and even schools.
Error: comunity Suggestion: community
Sentence: When the person change his place, he wil discover new opportunities to learn something new such as language, job, colleague, friends and even new atmosphere.
Error: wil Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: For instance, in the previous example, when we had moved to the new house, I found a new job since I worked in a company that it didn't give a good salary, but I worked with a new company that gave a lot of ideas and mony.
Error: mony Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: This experience taught me that we should t alter our place to gain knoweledge and attain experiences.
Error: knoweledge Suggestion: knowledge
Sentence: By the way of conclusion, based on the argument above, I concur to move from plce to another till find the best one then we can settle and live in a good life with our family, freinds, and colleagues.
Error: plce Suggestion: place
Error: freinds Suggestion: friends
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