Some people think it doesn’t matter for children to learn how to manage their own money. However, in my opinion, being taught to deal with their money is a great way to prepare to be adults economically responsible.
To begin with, knowing how to manage money such as dealing with banks affects one’s future property. To be specific, there will be a lot more difference if you save up your money since you are a little. For example as my personal experience, when I went to elementary school, I used to save up all my pocket money and enjoy going to the bank for fun which allows me to get used and learn about financial details. Thus, I started to open up several bank account, and invest funds. I even sometimes checked out monetary currency and interests of deposits. Surprisingly, I did all of the processes as thinking that playing games. Now, compared to those who are the same age as me, I have a lot more properties. Therefore, people figured out how to manage their own money at a young age tended to be wealthier than those who rarely did.
On top of that, one’s personal financial issues often depend on their habits. You get the picture that habits are hard to fix or change so that it is truly essential to creating appropriate habits at a young age. If children can’t get any advice about the importance of balance between saving and spending money they solely keep the habit of spending money without saving it. Hence, I would extremely say that they might bankrupt because even after they become adults, they will spend on whatever they want even if they have little money. For example, a friend of mine used to spend all of her money right after she got her pocket money when she was a child. She hadn’t been taught about financial management skills and now, she still uses all of her money whenever she likes. Sometimes, I got a call from her that she had an economic problem and asked me for help.
To sum up, I admit there’s an exception that some children do not need to learn the methods of money-saving and spending since they might learn naturally. However, I strongly believe that children should be financially knowledgable to be responsible adults.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 580, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...erests of deposits. Surprisingly, I did all of the processes as thinking that playing game...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, even so, for example, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6940874036 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58176536261 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550128534704 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.21837928 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1052631579 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05263157895 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234203665193 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0704776143668 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546514587799 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15790096758 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270860913103 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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