The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australia men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australia men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Anmol jjj on Wed, 09/25/2019 - 02:52

The given bar chart elucidates the information regarding the physical activity of males and females group in Australian in 2010, alloying in 15 years old to 65 years and over. The data is calibrated in proportion.

Overall, the first group of age men's proportion is greater than women, despite, the third group had extremely different rather than the first age group, and in the end, the last group made very fewer comparisons, between males and females.

Having a quick glance it is apparent that, in 2010the first group had 52.8 number a percentage was 5% more than females the regular activity at the age of 25 to 34 it took the opposite rather than first group, 52.5% of females at the age of 35 to 44 it was 13% more than females, in the fourth group of women had also the high percentage regarding daily physical actions.

Moving towards the rest of the information of two groups women had 53% of activities, on the other,r hand men's were on 45.1% at last males and women participation in regular activities they had only 0.4% difference in between men and women in Australia

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 99, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , r
...omen had 53% of activities, on the other,r hand mens were on 45.1% at last males a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, regarding, so, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 906.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 191.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74345549738 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56588306977 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534031413613 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.4926829268 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.146507044 43.030603864 254% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 181.2 112.824112599 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.2 22.9334400587 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.23603664747 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263160685442 0.215688989381 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133742950884 0.103423049105 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710998739538 0.0843802449381 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164115957485 0.15604864568 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272500529128 0.0819641961636 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 13.2329268293 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.83 61.2550243902 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.3012195122 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.9970731707 156% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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