There is an universal consensus that private life of people who are well-known for public should be shown on TV or other information technologies. However, other people argue that popular people have their own right to preserve their privacy. This essay will discuss both these viewpoints and give possible solution for this argument.
On the one hand, the economical and psychological resources of famous people are certainly audiences and public promotions as they earn money with advertising themselves. Therefore, celebrities have to try different types of contents to attracts public's attention in order to make a better career for them.
On the other hand, regarding their own life with all people would be somewhat inadequate at the moment as it is unescapable truth that stars more likely to be in jeopardy. We must be aknowledged that more and more crime commitments are become due to exceed apparent on social media, for example, noticing the location or post private photographs. Even though there are sufficiency of legislation about privacy and security people also should be aware of what they are posting as more laws and legislation developed more criminals' methods are stimulated. To illustrate, in Mongolia, an actress called MiMi has become this kind of victim recently due to her unconscious activities on Facebook and many of her fan fell into anxiety. Not only because of crimes, particular person can be not interested in revealing his or her life. On this occasion, we should be respectful about his or her decision and subsidize them for the other contents.
In conclusion, providing people with their personal matters can lead to a huge trouble, if an appropriate security system or settings are not situated properly. Rather than revealing their own life, attracting audience with much more enrapture or ravishing performances would be more safe and creative.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Line 3, column 238, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'attract'.
Suggestion: attract
...e to try different types of contents to attracts publics attention in order to make a be...
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Line 5, column 940, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... subsidize them for the other contents. In conclusion, providing people with the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25742574257 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84797638909 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607260726073 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1205868587 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.538461538 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3076923077 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.07692307692 7.06120827912 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242158612392 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848944138419 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558499013697 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128206964443 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0906597031023 0.056905535591 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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