Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Hardly would one doubt that media has the significant impact on the human life. Most critical way to make connection between people and celebrities is media. They can influence society via several options that media provide for them. Because of it, academics find celebrities and their behavior very important. It is not unexpected that there are numerous researches about it. In this matter, academics have different ways, some believe that celebrities can impact younger people more than older people and agnatinist groups have opposed idea. I find myself with the former group and I will vindicate my perspective in the ensuing paragraphs.
First thing that comes to mind is that young people are more engage in media. All intently know that they spend a lot of time on surfing internet. Most of them are member of the social media which celebrities are active in them to present their idea and comments or show their private life. As a result, young people are more supposed to their activities and are more familiar with them. While, adult are so much busy to allocate time to superficial news such ordinary events which are reporting by celebrities every day. As a result, the more interaction young people have, the more important celebrities become.
Second reason that supports my idea is that young people avid to become well-known in future. All intently know that young people have a lot of hopes to accrue and try to draw their way. Most of them attempt to find their way so they follow some who are identified as the success person to become a leader for them. Therefore, they follow celebrities who are available to do this role for them. While, adult persons have found their way and know how to pass their way. In addition, adult people have critical look to celebrities and most of their act are not acceptable or reasonable for them. For example when I was child I wanted to become an actor, because I thought that actors are wealthy person that can buy anything that they want. Large house, daily purchase, big cars and beauty face. But when I became older I noticed that all pictures that circulate on the media about them are not real. They take their pictures on the other’s house and when they become old they do not enough money and other young actor replace with them. So till they are young and beauty they can work and gain money, while other jobs you promote as you become older.
All in all, I think young people are more vulnerable rather than old people, because of their less experience. As people become older they look at everything realistically and do not attract by something such reputation. On the other hand, young people are attract by something that they see and just want to gain them, so It is more possible that celebrities are more important for them.
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- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, i think, in addition, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2326.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77618069815 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39049123549 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464065708419 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.645322685 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1481481481 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.037037037 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190956961399 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581434082108 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482578437325 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13282118548 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370880830392 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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