Some people believe that success in life depends on hard work and determination, while others believe that other factors like money and personal appearance are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people believe that success in life depends on hard work and determination, while others believe that other factors like money and personal appearance are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are some who believe that, having a determined mind and will power are the factors for success. However others feel that, success comes solely through cash and looks.

On the one hand, those who uphold the idea that good looks and money are needed for success have their own reasoning. They pointed out that , good looks increases the confidence of a person and have more chances to succeed in his life. For example, with good looks a person can suceeded in their modelling or acting fields. In addition to that, money needed to become an entrepreneur or to be invest are considered to be more chances to get succeeded in their fields.

On the other hand, determination and hardworking are important to success . Firstly , determination gives motivation to setting up goals which become the cornerstone of success. For instance , Mary curie determined to finish her husband's unfinished work after his death and later discovered radium.

Another reason is that, determination is not only enough to be succeed efforts are also valid. Determination become useless when there is no hard work in behind. . In other words, only those succeeded in their life who have put lot of sweat and have determination in their respective fields.

In conclusion from the above i strongly believe that, success is only depends on how deeply people hold on to their determination and the effort they put it into their life.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3139.0 1615.20841683 194% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 9.77881619938 5.12529762239 191% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 8.09214372671 2.80592935109 288% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476635514019 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 772.2 506.74238477 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.4 1.60771543086 149% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 242.765111596 49.4020404114 491% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 241.461538462 106.682146367 226% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 24.6923076923 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2307692308 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 25.0 5.01903807615 498% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0247484255428 0.244688304435 10% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407110400968 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0425803947125 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0849755671335 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680182485165 0.056905535591 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 37.0 13.0946893788 283% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -20.56 50.2224549098 -41% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.44779559118 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.1 11.3001002004 196% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 39.74 12.4159519038 320% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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