Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
when it comes to the matter of opinion, though, there are differences between famous people's opinion and older people. in this regard, some people hold the view that the opinion of famous people are more important and people in all over the world hear, or seem so, while others maintain opposite view and say older people's opinion have a lot information great value. as far as I am concerned, the later point carries more weight, of course the famous people's opinion also have a great value, I will try to examine my reasons as follows.
the first reason that should be stated here is that opinion of older people resemble a dynamic map.in our life, there are numerous difficulties and troublesome situation that we have to deal with. the exchange should be done for benefit of other people who using older persons opinion. the elder people have a great deal of experience, and it is more enough for surviving in the challenging of the modern life. as many younger people confess, confronting with these situation is one matter, while using the older people opinion for overcomming difficulties is another. let me look at a person can successfully gain from his granfather, when he need help to get himself out of a hard situation, not only the granfather can equip the son with insightful view over various events and give them rewarding experiences, but also can help them with technical advice for dealing and solving emergency. finally, a person is more apt to prosperity when can use the older personality's opinion.
another subtle point is that we should not pay attention to famous people opinion just becuse of who they are. being a well-known basketball player, for example, dose not make a some one an expert in environmental issue. if that player feel srtongly about an issue, he can use his fame to draw attention to it and get other people involved.
in conclusion, it is best to hear out celebetities' opinion, but at the end make an intelligent and informed decision based upon either our own information, intelligence and experience, or rely on older people opinion who went though a lot event.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89010989011 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65742126578 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554945054945 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.0635860654 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.923076923 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.6045352989 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215622870411 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848220280671 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0575585676582 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127515119804 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641461209463 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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