Both the reading passage and the lecture are about early people's migration to the American continent. The author draws our attention to the Northern Land Bridge theory which claims that Clovis people, migrants from Eastern Asia, were the first ones to move to North America through a land bridge. The lecturer, however, points out some facts that significantly undermine the above-mentioned theory.
First of all, we learn from the reading passage that there were some stone artifacts found across the continent made by eastern asian settles that prove the theory that Clovis were first. Nevertheless, the lecturer claims that several sites have been found that are older than 80 000 years while the Clovis are believed to have arrived to North America just 11 000 - 13 000 years ago. Moreover, those sites were found as far as Chilie. Undoubtedly, travelling there would take a significant amount of time. This also undermines the Clovis-first theory supported by the author.
Secondly, the reading passage states that the first settlers were from Eastern Asia. However, from the lecture we learn that North America was, in fact, colonized by many different people. The lecturer goes on noting that the conducted DNA analysis shows that there were many settlers from Siberia, who arrived approximately 40 000 years ago.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 418, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rs ago. Moreover, those sites were found as far as Chilie. Undoubtedly, travellin...
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Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...orth America was, in fact, colonized by many different people. The lecturer goes on noting tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, while, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 7.30242825607 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1113.0 1373.03311258 81% => OK
No of words: 213.0 270.72406181 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22535211268 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82027741392 4.04702891845 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.492301887 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 145.348785872 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586854460094 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 336.6 419.366225166 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.23620309051 61% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3349074926 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.181818182 110.228320801 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3636363636 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.09090909091 7.06452816374 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.088204575709 0.272083759551 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0304678836662 0.0996497079465 31% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0963479078702 0.0662205650399 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0816152053692 0.162205337803 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115421330329 0.0443174109184 260% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.3589403974 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.8541721854 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.2367328918 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 63.6247240618 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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