The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Competition and cooperation are seen as two contradictory traits that can be instilled in youth in order to further their leadership skills. Regarding the question which one is more important, I believe that while both are crucial, cooperation should be instilled more excesivally for various reasons.
Firstly, in most of the modern societies of today, competition is all around us. We see reality competitions, our parents are always comepting for the next promotion or the next raise, and children compete amongst themselves for roles in school plays, being admitted to the soccer team and so on. Due to that, children are raised with a sense of competition anyway, and thus even if this trait is as important for leadership as cooperation, it is more naturally instilled in the younger generations. Cooperation, on the otherhand, is not instilled in the same way, and thus it is important to instill it further so as to allow the creation of future leadership in various fields.
Moreover, many rightfully argue that by cooperation, human beings can achieve much more than through personal promotion only, and this has been true from the begininng of mankind. For example, prehistoric cavemen were much more succesful in catching food when they worked together, focusing on catching one animal as opposed to each catching his own. I believe this is true to modern day society as well. A group of leaders would be much more capable of acheiving succcess if they would work together with other peers. If they compete with each other, one of them might prevaile, but even he would be less succesful than if he were to work together with others. Based on this understanding, I see cooperation as more important than competition.
Lastly, through cooperation, all sides and peers can succeed together, while through competition only one side succeeds at the expense of the others. This is the classic debate between a zero sum game, competition, and a positive sum game, cooperation. While in a zero sum game, for example a sports match, the victory of one side must mean the loss of the other, in a positive sum game, such as in the case of singing a sales contract, both sides can be satisfied and victorious simultaniouslly. I believe we should promote a society which thrives to base it's advancements through positive sum games, and since cooperation is crucial in order to that, I believe it is more important than comeptition.
Of course, competition is also important. Most significantlly, A political candidate can succeed in being elected to office only by promoting himself at the expense of his rival. In a society like ours, this is surely very important for anyone who wants to be in a leadership position. However, as abovementioned, competition is all around us, and young people today do not lack examples of it. Therefore, they are already aware of the importance of competition, and it is not crucial to further instill competition in them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 613, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...s it is important to instill it further so as to allow the creation of future leadership...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, moreover, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, for example, of course, such as, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2484.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 494.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02834008097 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95574564698 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47975708502 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 781.2 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2916121229 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.285714286 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5238095238 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2380952381 5.21951772744 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169258057843 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523332235693 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364212431004 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102494900306 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0354829015432 0.0667264976115 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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