Some people think that competitive sports should be included as a subject in school, while others believe that it has a negative effect on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some people claim that schools should provide sports competitions for students, while others oppose, saying that there could be consequences. I believe that there should not, and here I will discuss the reasons below.
One idea is that it can lead to the increase of one’s performance. By competing with each other, they could gain more motivation, which one could stride to become better and get an insight of how competitive the world is. Players could also learn from their rivals, as each may master in some particular field, depending on which position they play. For example, basketball, which is a popular option among adolescents, when playing they could learn the ability of shooting hoops as well as drilling the ball. As there are ranks given, one could learn from a fellow competitor who performs better, and certainly benefit and also make improvements.
Some people may disagree, saying that this action could result in negative results, such as applying pressure on certain members that are much weaker. The reason being that one student may be extra competitive, and would do whatever it takes to achieve their goal. As everyone has their strength and weaknesses, for instance, a fellow classmate which lacks in skills may feel even more stressed, as a competitive classmate may go around giving orders and also harsh criticism due to their strong desire to win.
I believe that institutions should remain the content of the sports subject the same, without adding competitions to it, because I think sportsmanship is extremely important, and everyone should enjoy an activity without having to battle it out for rankings.
To conclude, unless students know how to have an amicable race, these would potentially affect one’s willingness to take part.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 329, Rule ID: FELLOW_CLASSMATE[1]
Message: Use simply 'classmate'.
Suggestion: classmate
...trength and weaknesses, for instance, a fellow classmate which lacks in skills may feel even mor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, may, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1512.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66924923772 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.032590474 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.0 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188885562934 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0700556825904 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868872166606 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121165992509 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118573855479 0.056905535591 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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