elephants are fascinating animals for people and both lecture and passage are about them and passages author presents some of their behavior which makes people amazed, but the lecturer does not believe in this behavior as something elephant usually and concisely do.
first, the passage's author acclaimed that elephants are aware of their death time and mentioned how they go near the water in a specific place after they get old and wait there until their death comes, by contrast, the lecturer said, in fact when elephants get old, their teeth lose its ability to chew, so they prefer to eat softer vegetables which they can find near waters.
secondly, the passage mentioned elephant can represent the world around them by painting flowers and other animals. So we can say they have artistic abilities, on the other hand, the lecturer said it is not their own ability, actually, there are some human trainers who control them by touching their ears which are so sensitive and teach them to remember who to paint lines. so they do not really have any understanding of what these lines present.
finally, the passage discusses elephants' fear of mics and other small mammals and mention its base. the lecturer refutes it, saying that this fear is because of elephants' unfamiliarity to mices and he mentioned that elephants who live in zoos do not afraid of mics at all.
all in all, the lecturer destroyed all of the passage points by science and observation.
- TPO 48 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- TOEFL T P O 43 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO INTEGRATED ELEPHANTS BEHAVIORS 51 85
- tpo42 75
- The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake's water-what scientists call its salinity-has been increasing steadily for years because the lake's water is evaporating faster than it is being replaced 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 22.412803532 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1226.0 1373.03311258 89% => OK
No of words: 248.0 270.72406181 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9435483871 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41623454699 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 145.348785872 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58064516129 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 377.1 419.366225166 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 21.2450331126 146% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.73986436 49.2860985944 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 153.25 110.228320801 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 21.698381199 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.375 7.06452816374 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120425154988 0.272083759551 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580156156798 0.0996497079465 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555061369005 0.0662205650399 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0716266442581 0.162205337803 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060531790426 0.0443174109184 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.3589403974 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 53.8541721854 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 63.6247240618 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 10.7273730684 252% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.498013245 137% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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