Some people think that children should learn how to compete, but others think that children should be taught to cooperate to become more useful adults.
Discuss both views and give your own opinions.
Children’s education has become a more debatable issue as people have become more aware of the importance of children’s development. While some people have different viewpoints about whether children should be taught to compete or collaborate, I firmly believe that they should learn both cooperation and competition with others.
On the one hand, children should learn how to be competitive in life to achieve success when they play a solo part.To be more specific, they need to compete to seize better opportunities. For instance, when applying to a scholarship or doing an entrance exam, they need to fight for benefits on their own. Additionally, competitiveness also helps foster children’s personal development as they need to work diligently.
On the other hand, it is also crucial to teach children to be cooperative as they are a part of society. That is, in numerous fields of life, collaborative skills are needed to succeed. For example, when children do group assignments at school, they should be a good team player, otherwise, in all likelihood, they will not accomplish their work successfully.
I argue that there are several situations in which both competition and collaboration are required simultaneously. To illustrate, when they participate in team sports, they learn to cooperate with their team members and at the same time, they need to compete with the opposite.
To conclude, it is clear that both competition and cooperation are virtues children should have in life. Besides, it is vital to teach them when they should be competitive and collaborative.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 116, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...ieve success when they play a solo part.To be more specific, they need to compete ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, so, while, for example, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1364.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39130434783 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27571420473 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7008510072 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.666666667 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0833333333 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267093752987 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114023580799 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889680608862 0.0667982634062 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174435852421 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10098072586 0.056905535591 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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