It is true that the government are spending a tremendous amount of money on the nation's champions. Hence, some people believe that the government should allocate more resources on campaigns to promote citizens to be active and healthy rather than spending money on a few athletes to win tournaments and championships. In my opinion, I partly disagree with the statement since contesting athletes bring their countries foreign investments and benefit the public greatly.
Firstly, investing more resources in maintaining athletes ensures more chances of victory in the Olympics, and this tournament is worldwide. This is a matter of patriotism and pride since a country with many medalists will be seen as the top country for certain sport. For example, vietnamese athletes travel to the US to study archery. Secondly, money spent on athletes concludes the construct and maintain of sports facilities that can be useful to the public. Practice is needed for an athlete to compete in such large competition; thus, all sport equipment should be in constant good shape. Lastly, the athletes represent their countries, they show other countries the economic power and living condition of their homeland. Their performances in the game show the world the capability to train athletes and the power of the nation. For example, athletes from foreign countries travel to countries with gold medalists to train.
However, all things should be balanced; If the government neglects the public's health, there will be consequences. A society with a downgrade physical health means a decline in the work force, thus can affects the economy adversely. Moreover, ifthe public's health condition is bad, the public can be vulnerable to diseases and again stunt the nation's economy.
In conclusion, resources should be spent equally on athletes and the public to ensures the development of a nation.
- Many doctors say that people in today’s world do not do enough physical exercise. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions are there to this problem? 89
- Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? 73
- Instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics, governments should spend the money on programmes encouraging the public to be active and stay healthy.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?Give reasons for your answe 73
- Nowadays children mostly spend their time playing computer games rather than sports.What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development. 89
- Internet social media have become very popular. To what extent do you think this is a good or bad thing? Why do you think this is the case? 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 53, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...vesting more resources in maintaining a nations athlete ensures more chances of victory...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 193, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a country' or simply 'countries'?
Suggestion: a country; countries
...is is a matter of patriotism and pride, a countries with many medalists will be seen as the...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ountries with gold medalists to train. However all things should be balanced; If the g...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 71, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'publics'' or 'public's'?
Suggestion: publics'; public's
...alanced; If the government neglects the publics health, there are consequences. A socie...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 244, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'publics'' or 'public's'?
Suggestion: publics'; public's
...the economy adversely. Moreover, if the publics health condition is bad, the public can...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 334, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
... vulnerable to diseases, thus stunt the nations economy. In conclusion, resources shou...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1587.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3255033557 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85299834693 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540268456376 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.4468796651 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.8 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8666666667 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260851994334 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900040060519 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404333245352 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159218981347 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554119787523 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.