Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Choosing future career is one of the most challenging decision in each person's life. As people's job could affect their feeling and determine their social level, they should pay more attention in choosing it. Some people believe that it is better for children to continue their parent's job, whereas some others hold an opposite attitude. In my view, kids who selecting their family's occupation as their future job benefits a lot for two remarkable reasons.
The main reason is that children could gain more success in their future job by following their parent's career. Kids spend most of their life time with their parents and get familiar with various aspects of their parent’s job, while they are talking about it in daily life. Furthermore, if they want to find their real interest, they will have opportunity to work as part-time job besides them. So, children could acquire vast knowledge about this career and make better decision for their future job which leads to their prosperity. For example, when I went to high school, I should choose the field of my study which distinguish general field of my future profession. Since both of my parents were lawyer and used to argue about their work at home, I had a great amount of information on this job. For becoming sure about my interest, I decided to spend part of my time working as internship for my parents. Although at first it is hard for me to adapt myself with difficulties of this job, this experience provided me with valuable data for choosing my future job logically. Undoubtedly, my today's success as the best lawyer in our country, originated from my consciously decision which gain by choosing my parent's job. As you can see children benefit by continuing their parents career.
Second, kids who pursuing their parent's job could use their valuable experience. One of the main pillar of success in one's job is accessing to someone who is familiar with key factors and obstacle on this field and use his advices. When children select career which is different from their parents, they deprive themselves from this golden chance. For instance, statistics show that kids who continue their family's profession have high rate of success in early ages compare to others initiate new job. Researcher's investigation demonstrates that choosing parent’s career not only would inform children about risk of the job, but also they could work with parents as part-time job and gain some money for starting their own business earlier. Also, because kids learn from their parent’s failure and success, they don’t waste their time to obtain these experiences by themselves. If children didn't continue their parent's occupation, they wouldn't be able to use their knowledge and flourished in younger age.
In conclusion, I do believe that it is beneficial for children to selecting jobs similar to their parents. Not only do they become more successful in their future job, but they also could use their parents work experience. I think parents should encourage kids to continuing their job for having better future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 72, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...f the most challenging decision in each persons life. As peoples job could affect their...
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Message: Did you mean 'lifetime'?
Suggestion: lifetime
...arents career. Kids spend most of their life time with their parents and get familiar wit...
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Line 5, column 1229, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... which gain by choosing my parents job. As you can see children benefit by continu...
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Suggestion: one's
...e. One of the main pillar of success in ones job is accessing to someone who is fami...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... experiences by themselves. If children didnt continue their parents occupation, they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, whereas, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, talking about, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 81.0 43.0788530466 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2597.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 511.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08219178082 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59887298663 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465753424658 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 775.8 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.51792114695 284% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.963075761 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.208333333 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2916666667 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.457417861787 0.236089414692 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177104717524 0.076458572812 232% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786939497578 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.354730633001 0.150856017488 235% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299840934717 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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