It is better to work for business owned by someone else than to work for the business of one’s own family
In modern society, the employment of college students, especially those fresh graduates whose family members run a business, has drawn more and more attention of the society. Some people appreciate that it is beneficial to work for others for improving their independence. Contrary to the view is my perspective that it is more appropriate to work for their own family, for the following reasons.
To begin with, working for their own family has beneficial impacts on their personal development, which is of paramount importance to their future life. For one thing, since it is their own enterprise, that is to say, they can choose whatever they like to do. Under this circumstance, not only will they work happily and easily due to the interests, but they will also be able to focus on their career totally, which lays a solid foundation for personal future development. For another, their family enterprise makes a particular development plan for them, which means they get more exercise opportunities to improve themselves. To be more specific, they can travel for business more frequently, attend professional industry conferences, interact with senior experts, therefore giving rise to an improvement of knowledge, expansion of social networks, and accumulation of experience. All of these are a huge personal boost in the profession, which is more valuable for a youth. In contrast, in most general companies, these high-quality resources will not be concentrated in only one person.
In addition, working for own family gives people more freedom and ease. Due to their own enterprise, working hours are freer. They can determine their commute and workload to some extent. Thus, they can balance their family and life better. Only in this way can one enjoy their work and happy life. Here comes a concrete example about my friend Job who works in his parents’ company, and once his wife wanted to go to Switzerland to see the splendid snow mountains. As a result, he agreed and went there immediately. During the month of the trip, they left a precious memory together and deepened their relationship. However, if they work for someone else, this is absolutely not going to happen for no boss allows employees to leave such a long time so suddenly. We colleague all act him as a winner of life.
Hence, from what has been discussed above, I draw a conclusion that it is wise to work for their own family as it is advantageous for them to have better personal development and more freedom and ease.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in contrast, as a result, for one thing, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04545454545 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85284648862 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557416267943 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9279894151 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.428571429 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9047619048 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.42857142857 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361166344199 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116365958694 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.09457124427 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251984372495 0.150856017488 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167258436885 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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