Children nowadays watch significantly more television than in the past, which reduces their activity levels accordingly. Why is this the case?What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activity among children?

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Children nowadays watch significantly more television than in the past, which reduces their activity levels accordingly. Why is this the case?

What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activity among children?

Television is vital substance in our modern life. Nowadays, young part of society spend a lot of time for watching TV programmes than previous generation, which increase their indolent, simultaneously. There are several measures for this circumstance, also a several strategies to interest children to be more active.

Firstly, development of TV producing and TV programmes, which broadcast in daily basis increased dramatically from the past. For example, TV became much bigger and qualitative. Also quality of broadcasting and content of programmes are increased over last decades. Children can watch their favourite cartoons or movies in HD or UHD dimensions, which attract not only children but also adults. Because of these factors they intend to watch TV rather than do sports.

However children aren't spending a enough time to their outdoor activities. One suggestion is that could be motivate teenagers is to do group activities such as playing football, going to swimming or running together with friends. These type of sports might help children not only to become healthy, but also helps to make friends. The second suggestion is that broadcasting corporations should expand sport related programmes in their content. It might help teenagers to choose a suitable activities.

To sum up, development of TV technologies and increasing quality of broadcasting has effect on television viewing. However this development can teach youths to choose an active lifestyle.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'strategy'?
Suggestion: strategy
...s for this circumstance, also a several strategies to interest children to be more active....
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Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... TV became much bigger and qualitative. Also quality of broadcasting and content of ...
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Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ract not only children but also adults. Because of these factors they intend to watch T...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...nd to watch TV rather than do sports. However children arent spending a enough time t...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...ther than do sports. However children arent spending a enough time to their outdoor...
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Line 5, column 33, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...orts. However children arent spending a enough time to their outdoor activities...
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Line 5, column 490, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'activity'?
Suggestion: activity
...ght help teenagers to choose a suitable activities. To sum up, development of TV technol...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, so, for example, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1254.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 227.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52422907489 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04061786212 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.63436123348 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 371.7 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.338399615 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1333333333 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 7.06120827912 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214919581248 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642983801845 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0529113181784 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124453984247 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215011905109 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.14 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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