Children nowadays watch significantly more television than in the past, which reduces their activity levels accordingly. Why is this the case?What measures can you suggest to encourage higher levels of activity among children?

Today, children tend to watch television, rather than do sport. Lack of playgrounds and sport facilities, parent's attention have influenced in thier tendency toward television. These problems lead to negative consequences, but I will give suggestions to encourage them to do outdoor activities.
Nowadays, residential neighborhood changes have led to young part of society to face with lack of playgrounds. There are a lot of high rise buildings, where teenagers could not find place to play group games such as football or basketball. This case enhanced children desire toward to stay at home and enjoy from watching television. Also, good television quality attracted to itself. These reasons led to children become isolated from community and have problem with eyes and become overweight. I think, Authority and home builders should build playgrounds for youths in order to make them to do outdoor activities and keep fit themselves.

The second reason is that due to dual-working lifestyle children have isolated from their parent's attention. They stayed at home, and also they have done what they want. Children become separated from community. Loneliness leads to children have problem with friendship. In my opinion friends can be motivate each other in order to enjoy doing sport. Also Parents should introduct their children to take part in sports and to make decision. Parents' have great experience in order to their childhood.
To sum up, I think juveniles should attraced in outdoor activities. It helps them to make friendship, keep fit themselves. Either government or communitoes must take responsibility in themselves and build sport facilities or playgrounds in good condition for usage.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS General Training

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 249, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uch as football or basketball. This case enhanced children desire toward to stay ...
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Line 4, column 352, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ch other in order to enjoy doing sport. Also Parents should introduct their children...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, i think, such as, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1444.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42857142857 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93011290712 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609022556391 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6281196112 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.0 106.682146367 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.0 20.7667163134 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13935756106 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445440665227 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426050702928 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.077374784806 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456975489541 0.056905535591 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.62 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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