It has long been discussed that how many working days per week will be the optimal strategy for employees. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the statement that it will be more enjoyable to work only three days a week for long hours than working five days a week for shorter hours for two reasons.
To begin with, by shortening the working days of a week, with the other conditions remaining the same, the productivity per working day will increase, leading to an increase in work efficiency. Since an employee who used to have five working days a week to accomplish his or her work will now only have three working days instead. Therefore, the employee will need to do more within a working day so the work can be completed on time. In this way, work can be done within fewer working days. Take a working model of a product manager for an example. If there are four functions that need to be built in a product within four weeks, and he is given five working days a week, so he will have twenty working days to build up these four functions. In this case, the project manager can spend five working days for each function. However, if he is now given three working days a week, which means he only gets twelve working days to complete this project, he can now only spend three working days for each function, which leads to a significant growth of the working efficiency. Consequently, the example demonstrates the advantage that working for a fewer working days a week can improve working productivity.
Furthermore, reducing working days within a week can provide employees with more days without work, which can make employees more relaxed and improve their mental health. From time to time, there are news displaying that employees working for too long a week that they didn't get enough rest and finally became mentally ill and sued their companies for mistreatment. To prevent this from happening again, we can let employees work fewer days a week, so they will have more days to relax. They can have more time staying with their families and friends and have more time on their private lives to do whatever they like to have a work life balance. In this way, the mental health of employees will be guaranteed to improve.
In a conclusion, based on the two reasons above, I agree with the statement that it is more enjoyable and advantageous to have a job working only three days a week for long hours than to have a job that would need to work five days a week for shorter hours.
- TPO-29:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use specific reasons and examples to 73
- TOEFL T P O 28 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to suppo 66
- All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools. 62
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 270, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...s working for too long a week that they didnt get enough rest and finally became ment...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58836689038 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43944934812 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.402684563758 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.0 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.5412153357 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.647058824 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2941176471 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.466467544696 0.236089414692 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.208868300022 0.076458572812 273% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138372643141 0.0737576698707 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.397131029947 0.150856017488 263% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135130396357 0.0645574589148 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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