Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view？
Nowadays, with commercial development, companies pay more and more attention to the marketing aspect. As one of the most important part, firms invest a mass of money in advertising, at the same time the dispute of immoral and inappropriate become a topic in people’s daily life. From my perspective, I completely agree with this opinion that some of the advertisements use inappropriate ways of promotion.
First and foremost, some of the advertisements contain information with a misunderstanding massage when they deliver to the customer. Such as some energy drink advertisements, the show delivers to the teenager that with drinking the energy-water, they could make the dangerous movement in some sport. This could provide the message that the main reason for those movements are not because of training but the product. The teenager may learn those after saw that and injured themselves.
The second, some advertisements that include too much adult information such as sex and this could bring a negative impact on young people’s minds. Furthermore, to attract a group of children, some fast-food companies may put toys or popular cartoon figures into the commercial, and this makes children purchase more fast food and badly influence their health. Moreover, this will also increase the cost of parents and increase the financial burden on parents. It is not only happened in the food industry, but it is also commonly appeared in the video game and also the accessories of movies and games.
To sum up, commercial plays vital role in the business marketing factor and the positive could both be beneficial to firms and customers; however, companies should have the social responsibility when they promote their commercial and regulate the method, they present their products.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34507042254 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06384972929 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602112676056 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2944140237 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.5 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41666666667 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179877214196 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063642079811 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666228145829 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0970021973633 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0502921902623 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.