TPO 44 Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th

Children’s most important early relationships are with parents and parenting is the most fulfilling job that human being will ever have, but it’s not without challenges. Modern family life can be with various pressures on families such as parents being busy and lack of time. Some people believe that in this situation parents should do the things with their children that related to schoolwork, others would disagree. In my view, I think spending time to have fun playing games or sports can help lead to better outcomes for children. In the following paragraphs I delve into the most conspicuous reasons and examples justifying my point of view.

First of all, playing with children help them to have a better performance in their future interaction which is also lay the foundation for better social and academic skills. Playing games and sports involves observation, listening, supporting, physical movements and exploring the environment. Developing these skills lead children to gain strong problem-solving and great social confident. For example, when parents play "pretend game" with their child, it have a lot of benefits. Sometimes in pretend game children develop the theme and define imaginative role for parents and themselves. It let parents to get into their children world and also stimulate their kid’s creativity. Moreover, this deep interaction enhance children mood and mental health. This example clearly indicate that playing games and having fun have more benefits.

Secondly, it’s really fun for both parents and children. Parents spending time with their daughter or son not only opens the door for sharing emotion but also build a joyful bonding that last forever. For instance, when I was child, I remember every Mondays after I finished my school, my father came after me and bring me to pool. My Father taught me how to swim including the breast- and backstroke. Most importantly, we had a great time jumping into water and it was exhilarating. As soon as we finished swimming in pool, I and he went to a nearby fast-food and ate two sandwiches every time. He continued to do that for me until I finished my high-school. After all these years I have a great memory about that time and it makes me to smile every time I think about it. In other word, my father make me feel special.

To sum up, we can see how important some non-academic activities can be to children. Developing their skills and having fun are the reasons that I believe parent in lack of time should prefer playing games with their children over the doing school stuff.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...pretend game' with their child, it have a lot of benefits. Sometimes in pretend...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, after all, for example, for instance, i think, such as, first of all, in my view, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05128205128 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71654295592 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526806526807 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7226111089 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2916666667 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.875 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354983503889 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999819767677 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860034285657 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237462518083 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.05773469843 0.0645574589148 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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