These days a great number of children prefer spending time on computer games rather than on sports. Why it is? Is it positive and negative development?
In the modern era, virtual games are becoming more and more popular in all age groups. Millions of young children choose to play virtual games rather than sports. I will discuss the reasons for this phenomenon explain that why it is negative development in further ensuring paragraphs.
Firstly, these days, parents have a very hectic schedule in both personal and professional life. So, they cannot give much attention to their children. As they provide a variety of gadgets like videogames, tablet, and computer to their children rather than allowing to play in the ground. For example, my brother and his wife do not allow his child raj to play outside for security reasons. Furthermore, virtual games demanding less physical activity and it provides interesting character, graphics storyline, so they are becoming more popular amongst the children.
However, playing excessive video games can weaken the eyes because the computer screen produced U.V rays and higher brightness level which damage eyes. In addition, wasting time on computer games makes children lazier and more obese which caused many diseases like high blood pressure, cardiovascular diseases and many more in the young age. What is more, playing digital games reduces communication skills, as a result, it is difficult to establish communication with others for game-addicted children.
In conclusion, nowadays, children prefer more time to play games because of lack of parent’s time and demanding less physical activity. However, playing on computers causes many health issues and reduces communication skill development at a young age.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'playing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: playing
... to their children rather than allowing to play in the ground. For example, my brother ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: V
... because the computer screen produced U.V rays and higher brightness level which ...
^
Line 7, column 253, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ation skill development at a young age.
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76086942828 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4924491174 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.153846154 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2307692308 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23551936307 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850290698626 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533471799772 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151307547649 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294839657349 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 267, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'playing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: playing
... to their children rather than allowing to play in the ground. For example, my brother ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: V
... because the computer screen produced U.V rays and higher brightness level which ...
^
Line 7, column 253, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ation skill development at a young age.
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1380.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76086942828 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4924491174 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.153846154 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2307692308 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23551936307 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850290698626 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533471799772 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151307547649 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294839657349 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.