In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this

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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Today young people who just graduated high school could decide to continue learning in university or have a one-year break for travelling or working before getting back to school. Each decision itself has pros and cons. To me, I prefer the first choice, continue studying university right after finishing high school program. And the following reasons strengthen my decision.
First of all, I don’t deny the advantages that taking a break might offer to teenagers. By travelling, they can have a great time for relaxing after stressful years in high school, meeting many kinds of people, getting familiar to many cultures around the world and more importance is that it’s a good way to experience about independent life. Instead of travelling, others leverage this break for working to prepare enough financial for the university journey and to improve the communication skill outside the school. However, going together with these advantages, also there are many potential risks that the young people may be facing with when they return to the school after finishing their break or work such as becoming lazy, no mood for learning, increasing the demand for enjoyment or being attracted by the money from work. These would become difficulties for young people to re-adapt the academic environment and even escalate to ultimate consequence that they will get lost, being out of the track or never study the university. Some may argue that if student don’t go to work for one year how they can prepare enough money for university. But I think that today there are many ways to overcome this difficult like working part-time during learn or getting a loan from your parents or government.
Finally, from my view, it’s better to continue learning university after finishing high school program because at that time, the knowledge is still being fresh, easy for getting more. If keeping it for a long time without using, it might be getting blur and it’s too difficult for young people to refresh it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 133, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...avelling, they can have a great time for relaxing after stressful years in high s...
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Line 2, column 1053, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...or never study the university. Some may argue that if student don’t go to work for on...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, so, still, then, i think, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07552870091 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52355032451 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583081570997 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.8435012799 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.230769231 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376589409448 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128674922852 0.084324248473 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0974180318829 0.0667982634062 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27410642743 0.151304729494 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461471026148 0.056905535591 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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