Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Sports activities have a tremendous impact on people's life especially youngsters. From my vantage points, I believe that the government should enhance athletic activities for the following reasons.
To begin with, developing the sports field could encourage people to perform sports activities. For instance, if the governments enhance the sports equipment in the public gems that will motivate young individuals to do outwork activities. When I lived on campus, I did not like to go to the college's gem because all sports machines were too old and some of them were distorted, like a treadmill. Moreover, the college did not make regular renovations for it. As a result, i did not like to go to the gem. On the other hand, my friends studied at a private college. The dean was very interested in entertainment activities. He specialized a specific amount of college funds to enhance sports activities and teams. Therefore, My friends spent most of his time playing exercises and perform outwork activities. Therefore, he had an athletic body and personalties. That has a positive influence on his future because today he works as a model
In addition, enhancing sports activities could help governments to save a lot of money. For instance, when the government takes care of athletic games. the number of people playing these activities would increase. that will encourage individuals in these activities. Consequently, common diseases will be reduced and many contemporary disorders like high blood pressure and blood sugar will be dropped. In many countries like the USA, governments pay for medical insurance for seniors and teenagers. When these people play sports games, they will reduce exposure to many diseases. As a result, The government will save a lot of money because an increasing number of people have good health. On the other hand, if the government funds the artwork, the artwork will have benefits for a specific kind of people, artist. While other people will not have the advantage more than having fun.
To wrap it, for all a contemplating reasons, The government should fund and support the sports activities to encourage people to perform exercises and to improve individual's health
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- Tpo 25 Summarise the points made in the lecture being sure to explain how they case doubt on specific points made in the reading passage 70
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- If the university should spend money on building a quiet place to study or building a gym or building a place to play games which choice you like and why 60
- Some people think that they achieve success by being like others but others perfer to be different which do you think is better 60
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for instance, in addition, kind of, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22128851541 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89299470369 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498599439776 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5435200899 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.0434782609 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5217391304 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69565217391 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0911786719134 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0271733970871 0.076458572812 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0329012938631 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0706386430217 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283118923954 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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