At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
It is true that the figures for young people are greater than elderly in some nations. While I accept that having more population of teenagers and workforces may have a negative impact, I believe that they are more like to have a potential benefit.
There are several reasons why people think the bigger amount of young people cannot benefit our society. Firstly, young adults probably are not ready to enter the job market instantly because they have to be well- trained or studied technical courses in universities or college. People aged 18 even need to take three or four years to gain a higher education qualification and the government are required to subsidize a huge amount of school fees from public expenditure. Secondly, young adults are curious about the world that they tend to travel around the world and spend most of their savings to enjoy. Personally, I went to Australia in 2013 after I finished my first degree. Thirdly, some of them even suffered from social evils such as sexual health, drugs and alcohol when they have just entered society.
However, I would argue that these drawbacks are outweighed by the potential advantages. In the first place, well-educated young workforces are generally aggressive that they want to receive a high-return job offer so they would work extremely hard to be promoted in a higher position. Another reason is that junior staffs in companies tend to accept the new technology, such as internet, artificial intelligence and pay online and these could raise the productivity of a company. Some high tech companies founders are passionate about technology when they were young, such as Bill gate and Elon mask.
In conclusion, I agree that the possible return of large numbers of young people in the long-term are more significant than the negative consequences.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, while, in conclusion, such as, it is true, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.073089701 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69722841345 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601328903654 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4962748738 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.461538462 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6923076923 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148072744503 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518300648643 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051679723948 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100108205052 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501944629594 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, while, in conclusion, such as, it is true, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.073089701 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69722841345 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601328903654 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4962748738 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.461538462 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6923076923 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148072744503 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0518300648643 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051679723948 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100108205052 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501944629594 0.056905535591 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.