Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Working life is a next step that lead you to the greater world. It is a huge difference when it comes to work, being devoted to make living is the main reason why everyone are working in several job. You have to realize of your own talent and skill before applying for a job because the job will imply to you for a long time.
When people applying for a job, they clearly do not know if they will have the same job or stay in the same company until they retire. Some people get to attach and feel too comfortable with their current company or job that they do not think to try different occupation. This issue can make someone reliable because the employee is loyal enough to get promoted and to know more about the company and therefore also deserve some bonuses.
Despite all of that, trying different occupation also can be a great way to experience more. Therefore your talent and skill can develop more and you can also gain some knowledge from other company. For example, my friend’s father started working on a bank, but after several years, he decided to quit and opened his own business, which is a cafe. By doing that, he has wider knowledge in both type of occupation and has more value than others.
Changes are not always bad, sometimes it can be turning point to be better. Therefore, i think having two or more occupation during working life are great to gain variant of valueable knowledge.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 188, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun job seems to be countable; consider using: 'several jobs'.
Suggestion: several jobs
...main reason why everyone are working in several job. You have to realize of your own talent...
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Line 5, column 94, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... can be a great way to experience more. Therefore your talent and skill can develop more ...
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Line 7, column 88, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... turning point to be better. Therefore, i think having two or more occupation dur...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1162.0 1615.20841683 72% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5390625 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28956905658 2.80592935109 82% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578125 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 371.7 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.3167566798 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.8333333333 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 7.06120827912 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257320013375 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888015691182 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485097986511 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146569829318 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468980872385 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 12.4159519038 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 78.4519038076 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.