Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development?
Political leaders play a significant role in our society
to accelerate the development
of a country. At the same time, entertainers’ also
put a conspicuous impact on the shaping of our community interest. But, who should generate more money
and who have the right to do that, is a matter of dispute prevailing in our society
. Undeniably, celebrities, because of their wide popularities, are dominant over politicians in case of gaining remuneration. I believe, this
is a positive development
because of some reasons. Firstly
, with the advent of technology, celebrities have got the opportunities to achieve fame through various digital streaming platforms and media, for instance
, Youtube
, which is a likewise
platform can provide them with that kind of benefit very easily
. Not only that, plenty of similar platforms are there to make an ordinary person a newborn star overnight. Secondly
, different advertising companies often promote their adverts with the help of entertainers, as they can make quick impact
on peoples’ mind. By doing that, they can earn massive amount of money
. Besides
that, entertainers can also
help a society
to solve social problems. Most of the time, they donate money
for charity and foster developmental activities in society
. From that point of view, I believe, money
gaining by entertainers is a positive development
. On the other hand
, politicians, by nature of their work, tend to earn less money
than entertainers, if they are not corrupted. Because of the large gap between entertainers and politicians, sometimes politicians are impelled to commit crimes which is absolutely unexpected and that happen when they become dishonest to their job; however
, lawmakers don’t need much more money
according to the type of their job. Therefore
, I think what is important for politicians is their work ethics and honest but
not much amount of money
. To sum up, our society
has been benefitted for years through the benevolent contribution of celebrities, thereby, if they earn more money
, it will be a progressive development
as they will donate more money
for charity. Although
, politicians play important role
, gaining money
won’t be progressive for them as they might fall prey to corruption.
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- Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians What are the reasons for this Is it a positive or negative development 67
- Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians What are the reasons for this Is it a positive or negative development 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, i think, kind of, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 1615.20841683 121% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48732394366 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08889469007 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554929577465 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.10420841683 380% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 4.76152304609 336% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.932652714 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.588235294 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8823529412 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94117647059 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 32.0 4.38176352705 730% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271433113331 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840736441057 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669092605085 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0679038760257 0.151304729494 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657564303417 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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