Write a narrative essay about a risk you have taken.
Being an 18-year-old teenager has been the most memorable time in my life. Although a variety of new things came to me, I was excited to deal with all the changes. Not only was that time hard to forget, but so far it has also been the toughest time for me. I had to choose the universities I wanted to enroll in cautiously, then I sat for the most challenging examination in a student’s life - the national entrance exam. After a short period, I received a notification that I was admitted into HCM City’s Open University. I was so curious about how I was going to live in a different town and adapt to new environment.
It is not frequently straightforward and smooth to move into a new city as you expected it to. The first obstacle I met was finding an appropriate hostel to live in during the time I was studying here. Because of not having a motorbike, I had to find a place which was near my college. I could not afford the hostel’s price myself, so I had to look for a roommate to share the costs. It could be hazardous because I could not know whether they were good people. Accordingly, I decided to live with my schoolmate to maintain my safety. I have always been told that HCM City is so bustling and congested that there will be myriad of frauds, scams and social crimes such as robbery, pick-pocket and even murdering. Any time I got on a bus or went to a crowded place, I must always be vigilant and hold my bag in front of me so as not to get pick-pocketed. Additionally, it was absolutely a nightmare for me to come home late in the evening. Despite the fact that there were many people on the way home, I still felt afraid and could not believe in anyone but myself.
Traffic would be another issue I felt unaccustomed to when I lived in HCM City. The traffic here is so hasty, insane and complicated that a plenty of accidents occur every day. I felt like I was risking my life every time I got out. As a result of some people who did not obey the laws, I had to be more judicious to avoid unwanted dangers. They crossed the red light and went too fast, which made the traffic worse. Once I was shouted at by a man who did not want to wait in the congestion then he rode on the sidewalk and did not even care about the people walking there. Although it has been a year since I stayed in HCM City, I still felt hard to get used to the traffic here.
After living independently for virtually a year, I was eventually able to take good care of myself, become more confident and learn how to protect myself from evildoers. I missed the time when I was a little daughter of my parents a lot, but I knew I had to stay strong. In spite of facing lots of new changes in this city, I am gradually getting used to them now. It was hard for me to adapt at first, but I still had my family standing by me and supporting me. I felt so blessed to have them in my life.
| Post date | Users | Rates | Link to Content |
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| 2021-09-21 | Tran Hoang Thang | 78 | view |
| 2021-09-21 | phanduyphuc | 11 | view |
| 2020-08-05 | PupuMa401 | 75 | view |
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, look, so, still, then, such as, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 13.1623246493 220% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 24.0651302605 316% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 41.998997996 176% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2325.0 1615.20841683 144% => OK
No of words: 557.0 315.596192385 176% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.17414721724 5.12529762239 81% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.20363070211 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5650796252 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 176.041082164 156% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491921005386 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.9 506.74238477 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 5.43587174349 405% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 16.0721442886 174% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5232060008 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0357142857 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8928571429 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0436368892034 0.244688304435 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0134505399051 0.084324248473 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0239591870447 0.0667982634062 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0271541386991 0.151304729494 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00957904904091 0.056905535591 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 13.0946893788 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 50.2224549098 138% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.91 12.4159519038 56% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.