Write a narrative essay about an interesting place (village/city...) you have been to.
I have visited some places in my country. Traveling is my favorite and it is very interesting to me. In the past, when I was just a child about seven ages, I used to go to the largest city in Vietnam. It is Ho Chi Minh City. It is a beautiful and fun place to go. Ho Chi Minh City have been a modern and civilized city at that time and up to the present.
The reason why I had a chance to go to Ho Chi Minh City is that my parents had to go to work and I could go too. After a long sleep in the coach, I woke up with a surprised face. Every changed in front of my eyes, roads, villages, trees were all different from my hometown. The wide roads with hundreds of moving vehicles. There were cars, trucks, bicycles and even trains, which I could see almost exclusively in pictures. The houses have been built next to each other, there are five floors, ten floors, twenty floors and more. It was my first time seeing such tall buildings. For me, it's a new picture that makes me feel loved and excited to experience a big city.
After going off the coach, I rested in my cousin’s house. The next day, my cousin took me to the children’s play area. There, I participated in a lot of interesting games. Moreover, I even got to see elephants and giraffes there and I also got to feed an elephant with a piece of sugarcane. After that, my cousin took me to the water park, there was an extremely large lake and many other games, people called that big lake is an artificial sea. It contained a hundred people. I played some water games, such as swimming and water skiing. In the evening I got to eat a barbecue with my cousin and my parents at a fancy restaurant with food that was probably the first time I had ever tasted it. It was a long day with many memorable activities.
I ended the trip with a lot of emotions, happy and sad. Happy to know more new things. Sad to have to leave this very happy place. Perhaps Ho Chi Minh City is a city that is not very strange to us today. To me, it is a place that gives the most memorable memories. Because it was my first time going to a developed place and playing so many modern games.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 589, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ime seeing such tall buildings. For me, its a new picture that makes me feel loved ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 24.0651302605 220% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 416.0 315.596192385 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.14182692308 5.12529762239 81% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31513098973 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490384615385 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.0 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 5.43587174349 313% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 16.0721442886 180% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8946398591 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 59.4137931034 106.682146367 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.3448275862 20.7667163134 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.31034482759 7.06120827912 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 3.4128256513 469% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142898594825 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0395381028499 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0494273884826 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108371862919 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0744470043092 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.2 13.0946893788 40% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 50.2224549098 165% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 11.3001002004 46% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.14 12.4159519038 49% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.68 8.58950901804 78% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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