Nowadays, people’s life is changing rapidly and as a result , family relationships are affected. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In this increasingly developing society, it is the change of peple’s daily lifestyle that family relationships are considered to be affected. Although it cannot be denied that this affection comes as both positive and negative outcomes, I still personally believe the setbacks outweigh the merits.
On the other hand, changing lifestyles would bright various benefits for family members,especially in terms of convenient communication between each member. In addition, thanks to the rapid development of indispensably technological devides, a person can make communicating with his or her family members via social medias despite of separating by long distances. For example, oversea students who use Facebook can not only make a call with their parents but also enjoy their families’photos through newsfeed. Hence, this method would help to bridge the generation gap and promote better bond between each family member.
However, despite the benefit described above, I considered there are still many adverse outcomes related to life alteration. Firstly, the overuse of such modern devices described above can also negatively affect the family relationship. For example, if members become too addicted in using telephones for recreational hobbies such as surfing the net , texting messages and refute to communicate with other memmbers, the family time will be significantly reduced ,and the whole family relationship may be negatively affected. More over, the ambition in workplace of aldults nowadays is also an alarming issue which reduces family bond. In addition, it is really common to see many workers spend nearly a whole day struggling with heavy workloads and lose their work-life balance. As a result, they are less available at home, leading to weakened family interactions.
Taking everything into consideration, although some changes in lifestyle can bring communicating benefit to people’s life, my firm conviction is that such alterations can significantly weaken the family interactions in many ways
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Suggestion: , especially
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, really, so, still, for example, in addition, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71617161716 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14330511341 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.663366336634 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9209370803 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.230769231 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3076923077 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4615384615 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224572688466 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753643944007 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345569942616 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128547975188 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292173190564 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.25 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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