The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.
"Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author suggests that Clearview is a wonderful place for retirement. However, in order to substantiate his claim, the author needs to provide more evidence.
First, the article mentions that there was a significant drop of housing costs in Clearview last year. Yet, there is no information of the housing cost for previous years. It is possible that the price drop during the past year is due to some unprecedented events and is not likely to happen again. For example, due to a wrong decision made by the mayor, the factories in Clearview were less constrained by the environmental regulation and produced more noxious gas. Therefore, many citizens moved out of the cities, causing the house price to decrease significantly. By recognizing his mistake, the mayor decide to adopt the original regulation. As a result, many people are going to move back to Clearview this year, making the price to increase in contrary to the author's prediction.
Second, the mayor promises to many new programs in favor of the citizens. However, the author doesn't provide any information about the mayor's credit. Since politicians often guarantee to enact many attractive policies during the election campaign, it is likely that the mayor won't really make his promise come true in the future. For example, almost every politicians in Taiwan will say that they are going to deal with conflicts between Taiwan and China after they are elected. Yet, almost no one actually dare to do it.
The author also states that the health care system in Clearview is excellent due to the large number of physicians in this area. Nevertheless, there isn't any evidence showing that the more physician a city owns, the better the health care it has. The ability of those physicians is more important the number. For example, one of the reasons that there are so many physicians in this area is because the rent is low. Thus, those who just graduated from the universities and haven't gain enough money would like to start a clinic in this city. In this situation, it is possible that the health care system would not be better than other regions since most of the physicians here do not have much experience.
The author claims that the Clearview is a great place to enjoy life after retirement. However, he need to show more information according to the above questions to justify his claim.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 1918 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.748 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.564 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.435 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.682 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.285 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.502 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 768, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...he price to increase in contrary to the authors prediction. Second, the mayor promi...
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Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...or of the citizens. However, the author doesnt provide any information about the mayor...
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Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...cians in this area. Nevertheless, there isnt any evidence showing that the more phys...
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Line 7, column 474, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...ust graduated from the universities and havent gain enough money would like to start a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1973.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 400.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9325 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63646425161 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.343431887 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6818181818 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1818181818 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114501774734 0.218282227539 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0369411502502 0.0743258471296 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490816065859 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0637846194066 0.128457276422 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346639041477 0.0628817314937 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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