In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be
offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education
to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or
disagree?
Recently, some people agree that after the elementary, students who are at highly risk of being unemployed in the future should not be given more education. I strongly disagree with this notion for two reasons.
First, secondary education mainly aims to provide students with general knowledge so that they know how things work and what to do in particular situations. For example, with biology lectures in highs schools, students have a chance to learn how the body changes when they transit to the adulthood. Thanks for that, they will pay more attention to eat enough vitamins and proteins as well as do exercise regularly to be well developed, both in terms of cognition and physic. Therefore, education of high school must be given to children so that they can live balanced and healthy.
Second, it seems impossible to determine those who are not deserved to be educated after primary schools. While many people may argue that they can use IQ tests to sort out students, I believe that IQ tests will not work because this kind of test are designed to measure logical and mathematical abilities only; it does not reflect students’ potentials in terms of linguistics, music, art, and creativity. No matter which aspect students are good at, they can contribute a variety of outstanding achievements and inventions to make human civilization go further. For this reason, educators should not discriminate students; instead, they should educate them in 12 years to help them fully developed.
In conclusion, I believe that high school education should be given to every student without any discrimination. A full package of education will help students to be knowledgeable enough and succeed in many areas of the life.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd succeed in many areas of the life.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in particular, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12014134276 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80351228012 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611307420495 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.338662543 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.75 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.91666666667 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222003134624 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087262481016 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488490566693 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139284228787 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00986363531127 0.056905535591 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd succeed in many areas of the life.
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in particular, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12014134276 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80351228012 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611307420495 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.338662543 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.75 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.91666666667 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222003134624 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087262481016 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488490566693 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139284228787 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00986363531127 0.056905535591 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.