One of the consequences improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing

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One of the consequences improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing.

The modern medical system and research give us great opportunities. The medicine can now heal deadly diseases. Medicine is finding new ways to slow down aging. As a result, people live longer these days. I firmly believe that a longer lifespan provides many more advantages than disadvantages. Many people think that increasing life expectancy increases the number of unemployed and retirees and damages the country's economy. But this opinion is erroneous and not supported by the facts. With the increase in life expectancy, people become more active and contribute to the life of society even in old age. For example, professors, researchers, teachers, lawyers, writers, and many other professions have a wealth of experience and can be of great benefit to society. Thus, when a professor discovers a theory in his 70s, we have to thank expanded medical research and treatment. So they can teach us a lot. For example a teacher. They show us the right path.

Finally, as the number of working parents is heightening, grandparents are the last hope for young children. Older people are doing us a favour by taking most of our family burdens. Besides, people who we consider no longer useful to the society due to their age, have gifted us the world we live in today with their hard work, tax money and love.

In conclude , on my view this enhanced life expectancy is a blessing for the human race. We should be grateful.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 12, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...work, tax money and love. In conclude , on my view this enhanced life expectanc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, if, so, thus, for example, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1186.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 241.0 315.596192385 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92116182573 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71342590553 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.639004149378 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 374.4 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.8155341234 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 65.8888888889 106.682146367 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3888888889 20.7667163134 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38888888889 7.06120827912 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231340501905 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586362480384 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.079996073261 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133319842639 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649836250883 0.056905535591 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 13.0946893788 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 50.2224549098 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.66 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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