It's generally believed that success in fields such as art and sport can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. (1) However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or artist. (2)
Sports and Art may be thought of as fundamentally different activities, yet have some resemblance as both domains have a participatory and spectatorial aspect. (Background statement) While some believe that being naturally gifted will help excel in these fields, there are people who have performed remarkable feats, through sheer dedication and effective mentoring. (Paraphrase)This essay will emphasize both views objectively, before arriving at a conclusion. (Thesis).
(Topic Statement) At a glance, some people are prodigious in certain fields right from their formative years, with adequate encouragement these individuals show impressive mastery in their appropriate fields. This is usually identified by either parents or teachers who recognize their innate skills and work constructively to bring out the best in them; be it art or sport. (Reason) (Example) For instance, Sachin Tendulkar joined the National cricket team of India at a surprisingly young age of 17, and has outperformed many in this sport. (Connecting Statement) His unquestionable talent from his childhood has made him incredibly popular, earning him the moniker, “God of Cricket ''.
(Topic Statement) On deeper inspection, both fields are quite demanding in terms of practice, while art expresses feelings and state of mind, one can plausibly assert that sport is a form of art. Reason Ultimately success in any field depends on personal interest and the passion he/she has to eventually succeed , by rigorously training to achieve perfection. Example To cite an example, if star shuttle player P V Sindhu, had not persevered and worked hard, though she had a humble beginning, she would not have earned a silver medal in the olympics.
In conclusion, this essay has aptly emphasized that ‘hard work pays off’ and that anyone can achieve their desired outcome, provided that they have strong determination to be a winner!
- In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them 89
- When People move to another country some of them decide to follow the custom of the new country others prefer to keep own customs Compare these choices and support your opinion 78
- Many people say teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong Others say teachers should only teach students academic studies Discuss both views and state your opinion 78
- Some people opine that a new language should be invented for people from different countries to use for international communication How do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages 61
- Popular events like the football worldcup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tension and releasing patriotic emotions in a safeway To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion 89
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...tually succeed , by rigorously training to achieve perfection. Example To cite an example,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1622.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53583617747 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99977208748 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.686006825939 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 31.3874744718 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.454545455 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6363636364 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90909090909 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202194683728 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0679275706436 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521050588745 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11076349985 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025911939069 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.21 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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