Many products that people buy are made in other countries.
Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.
People tend to buy many items from other nations, increasing culture communication between those nations. However, this has the effect of reducing local business income, leading to rise the unemployment rate in a country.
Initially, one way to communicate between countries can be established with more and more people shopping for foreign products, showing interest in those countries. This is because the influence of the growing era making people want to try to purchase the product being advertised. For instance, 85% of young people in Indonesia watch YouTube, and this platform usually has advertisements, like typical foods from South Korea, having impact on high curiosity about these foods. Nonetheless, I believe that more curiosity towards the own products is better than the foreign goods, being to support each other's local items so that local items can go international.
On the other hand, the inclusion of local businesses will decrease if numerous people shop for their needs from foreign products, resulting an increase unemployment because a plethora of people shop for those products consequently that a number of local businesses are closed. According to study of UNIMED, there are 250 local businesses closed and resulted in a rise of around 2800 unemployment in Indonesia because people with high income are more interested in buying foreign products, and they feel prestigious if they buy those. Therefore, I believe that local products are no less competitive than the ones, and people should help each other in developing their country's products.
In conclusion, buying goods from other countries will be the advantages to increase culture communication, while this can give an impact on local income. Where possible, if this continuously runs, there will be a decline in country’s economy.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, nonetheless, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42345276873 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86991942777 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530944625407 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.601942585 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.076923077 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6153846154 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247323000219 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103362868596 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857944961244 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144747169999 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100655698007 0.056905535591 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, nonetheless, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42345276873 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86991942777 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530944625407 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.601942585 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.076923077 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6153846154 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247323000219 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103362868596 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857944961244 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144747169999 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100655698007 0.056905535591 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.