Some people say that individuals who make a lot of money are most successful. Others think that those who contribute to society like scientists, teachers are most successful.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
These days, success is implied to be the paramount factor that directly impacts people's quality of life. Many opine that the achievements are radically possessed by the super money-made people, while others believed that the social contributors, notably, educators and researchers are better worth appreciating. From my perspective, without any boundaries, the quoted people have certain accomplishments in specific fields.
Initially, affluence is an effective assistance of many people’s success. Undeniably, finance plays an irreplaceable role on a daily basis of the human life. Commonly, with a big budget, people are permitted to satisfy their daily demands comfortably. Eventually, they are prone to have monetary allocations for sustainable development of many sectors which productively assure their success in the next period. Pham Nhat Vuong, for instance, the founder of Vin-group who has continually invested in proficient fields, typically education and astronomy. Consequently, he is arranged to be in the top position of one of the most successful people in Vietnam.
Notwithstanding, some people take an issue with the previous opinion as they assume that the number of involvements in community is far better a criterion of success. Those who exert beneficial effects on the entire society are entitled to gain respect from the crowns which is believed to be the precise for long-lasting achievements. The brainchildren of those social supporters is expected to wipe the difficulties out and significantly enhance people life. By utilizing Facebook, one of the most prominent social media generated by Mark Zuckerberg, people are exposed to the widespread fundamental knowledge. Hence, the contribution of Mark is commonly received the consideration of humans.
In conclusion, the success not only prioritize the wealthier, peoples from walks of life could have glorious achievement when their contribution is valuable.
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Suggestion: days'; day's
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...rtain accomplishments in specific fields Initially affluence is an effective assi...
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...nly received the consideration of humans In conclusion the success not only prior...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, if, so, while, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58477508651 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14103764756 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598615916955 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 289.0 20.2975951904 1424% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1614.0 106.682146367 1513% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 289.0 20.7667163134 1392% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 68.0 7.06120827912 963% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212198653558 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.212198653558 0.084324248473 252% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124000427411 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388240094407 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 149.4 13.0946893788 1141% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -238.78 50.2224549098 -475% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 118.4 11.3001002004 1048% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.56 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 23.93 8.58950901804 279% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 62.0 9.78957915832 633% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 117.6 10.1190380762 1162% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 118.0 10.7795591182 1095% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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