The practice of putting animals in artificial zones away from their natural habitats has stirred up a controversy around the world. Some people believe that this has a devastating effect on animals but others see this as beneficial for endangered creatures. In my opinion, if given appropriate attention, zoos can contribute to saving the lives of rare animals. Both viewpoints will be analysed in this essay in more depth.
On the one hand, some people see zoos as a cause of concern and dismiss / condemn the idea of keeping animals away from nature to live and breed in a limited space. This is because of the horrifying conditions of many zoos around the world especially in under developed areas, where animals are kept in dreadful conditions. For example, in 2007, three zoos in the USA were forced to close by the government after several reports claiming the outrageous treatment of animals came to light. Therefore, the viewpoint that sees zoos are cruel certainly holds water.
On the other hand, many argue that zoos contribute to preserving animals which are on the verge of being extinct. This is because zoos protect those animals from illegal hunters, poachers and dangerous conditions. For instance, tigers and crocodiles are being killed for their skin to be sold in the black market. Were these animals left to live in their natural habitat, their extinction would be inevitable. Thus, keeping animals in the zoo is advantageous from this perspective.
In conclusion, after analysing both sides of the argument, it seems to me that zoos play a key role in protecting animals. It is hoped that the rights and welfare of animals are prioritised by all organisations around the globe and zoos are kept under close scrutiny to ensure the safety of their animals.
- Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed However some people think that zoos are useful for protecting rare animals Discuss both views and give your opinion 56
- Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed However other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals Discuss both views and give your own opinion 61
- Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time and have problems as a result Why do many working people not get enough exercise What can be done about this problem 78
- Many governments think that economic progress is most important goal some people however think that other types of progress and equally important for a country 56
- Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed However other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals Discuss both views and give your own opinion 61
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92255892256 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56883601612 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538720538721 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 297.0 20.2975951904 1463% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1462.0 106.682146367 1370% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 297.0 20.7667163134 1430% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 104.0 7.06120827912 1473% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.67935871743 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31804122364 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.31804122364 0.084324248473 377% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207707308043 0.151304729494 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.015315524765 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 150.2 13.0946893788 1147% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -229.98 50.2224549098 -458% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 119.1 11.3001002004 1054% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.74 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 21.88 8.58950901804 255% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 57.0 9.78957915832 582% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 120.8 10.1190380762 1194% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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