Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the
future of society as a whole.
Over the past decades, the issue of whether or not young people have enough influence on the political men for deciding the future of the country has a great deal of attention from sociologists and policymakers. Although some may say that young people have a great influence on the politics of future societies; I, as well as many others, believe that the political structure of many countries is so week and impractical; hence, a small group of old political men deciding future of the country without considering the influence of young people.
First of all, an important reason why young people have little influence on a practical decision on the future of the country is that the political system of many countries is impractical. The political system of countries is consisting of a group of old men and women that they make decisions. In these countries, never ask and survey young people about practical intentions. They believe that they have enough knowledge and experience about all aspects of problems, and they have adequate information and broad horizon about future so that they can make the best determination about future without considering young people opinions.
Another reason for this point of view is that young people do not have enough power for deciding for the country. Because of the poor political system of the undemocratic country, political people do not allow allocate power to young people and teenagers. They contend that only some group of people can contribute to deciding on the country. If they allocate power to young people, the young people would make a problem for them. In this situation, they afraid of their power become week so that they may not allow young people to get power.
Finally, it is occasionally said that in democratic countries young people contribute to the future decision by participating in an election. In modern countries, when political people want to make an important decision about the future of the country, they ask young people to participate in the election and say their opinion about the decision. But, unfortunately, because of the improper political structure of many countries, elections are just some routine events that do not cause any important changes in the main way of development of society.
In conclusion, considering the ideas presented in the paragraphs above, I believe that young people today do not influence the important decisions that determine the future of the society as an effective influence on future events because of improper political structure.
- If people have the opportunity to get a secure job they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying 75
- TOEFL TPO 24 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- Do you agree or disagree? Rather than help children with their schoolwork, parents should encourage their children do their work independently. 60
- tpo 22 70
- TPO 32 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 37, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Over the past decades, the issue of whether or not young people have enough influence on t...
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Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ical. The political system of countries is consisting of a group of old men and women that th...
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Line 6, column 451, Rule ID: I_AFRAID[2]
Message: You miss the verb here. You should rather write: 'they're afraid'.
Suggestion: they're afraid
... a problem for them. In this situation, they afraid of their power become week so that they...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, may, so, well, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2158.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17505995204 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78472307149 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.393285371703 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.480840191 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.866666667 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373500026388 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149821859979 0.076458572812 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103461658302 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254138621705 0.150856017488 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0922387887474 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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