The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Nowadays young people involved in many areas such as politics, educations, social medias and so on. Youngs for being new members of societies taking an important duties since they are participating in different rules. Nevertheless, they are doing a great jobs and we always hear from news about them. Considering that everyone have different prespective toward people rules and influences in the society, youngs are doing a great job. Many people believe that rules are so strict for young members to follow. To me, as a young person, I thing so because I don't follow any specific or predefined rules. There are arguments that we should consider when we are talking about young ages.
First of all, young people are not experienced people and rules are just controling them from seeing out side of the box. Rules could make things more complicated and different for a person that didn't tasted why that rule is stablished and more importantly why she/he has to follow it. In one hand, we can learn from mistakes and on the other hands, there are rules that doesn't allow us to make mistakes. However, this rules are for a good reasons, but they are taking an important experiences from us. Once I remember that Rajy Jackson, a baseball player, who failed a lot in his own career, but people dont remember the fails, people remember home runs. He was the best player in the world. He just started to gain experineces by making mistakes (failures). In that way he learned, got experiences. As I am seeing my self and rules, they are not allowing me to get what I want. As a result, they are too strict to be followed by me or any young person.
Secondly, being as young member of society, we may define rules for own sake and in this period of the time. While these rules are well developed, it doesn't mean that they are suitable for next generations. This brings to my second point about rules, those rules may become out-date by the time of definitions, since new views, technologies, and social believes may change from one decade to another decade or from one generation to another. I make things hard for young peopleto obey those rules so new defnitions required for each generations based on their status and social needs. It hard to see rules like, everybody should vote, or everybody should study books to take exames. This kind of rules are not quite well in this area since we have human rights to decide whatever we want to vote or not, pluse there is planty of video tips in the YouTube to learn in less time in an efficient way than speding weeks or months to study a book. As you can imagine how it make followings so difficult.
To sum up, I am truly believe that rules are stricted and we following them is so hard for our future due to the fact that they are disabling us from thinking out of box and they are go old to deal with our needs
- TOEFL T P O 32 Integrated Writing Task 3
- TOEFL T P O 32 Integrated Writing Task 3
- Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole 70
- The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict 88
- It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'duty'?
Suggestion: duty
...embers of societies taking an important duties since they are participating in differe...
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Line 1, column 538, Rule ID: YOU_THING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'think' or 'thinks'?
Suggestion: think; thinks
... to follow. To me, as a young person, I thing so because I dont follow any specific o...
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Line 1, column 557, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...as a young person, I thing so because I dont follow any specific or predefined rules...
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Line 3, column 102, Rule ID: OUT_SIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'outside'?
Suggestion: outside
...es are just controling them from seeing out side of the box. Rules could make things mor...
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Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...licated and different for a person that didnt tasted why that rule is stablished and ...
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Line 3, column 372, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...n the other hands, there are rules that doesnt allow us to make mistakes. However, thi...
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Line 3, column 483, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'experience'?
Suggestion: experience
...asons, but they are taking an important experiences from us. Once I remember that Rajy Jack...
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Line 3, column 605, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...led a lot in his own career, but people dont remember the fails, people remember hom...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...hile these rules are well developed, it doesnt mean that they are suitable for next ge...
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Line 5, column 878, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient way" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ps in the YouTube to learn in less time in an efficient way than speding weeks or months to study a...
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Line 5, column 944, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...peding weeks or months to study a book. As you can imagine how it make followings ...
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Line 5, column 970, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...study a book. As you can imagine how it make followings so difficult. To sum up, ...
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Line 7, column 23, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'believed'.
Suggestion: believed
... so difficult. To sum up, I am truly believe that rules are stricted and we followin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, well, while, as to, kind of, such as, talking about, as a result, first of all, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 10.4613686534 249% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 7.30242825607 288% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 22.412803532 299% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 30.3222958057 218% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2346.0 1373.03311258 171% => OK
No of words: 515.0 270.72406181 190% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.55533980583 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.763781212 4.04702891845 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41122832945 2.5805825403 93% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 145.348785872 181% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51067961165 0.540411800872 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 745.2 419.366225166 178% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 3.25607064018 491% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 1.25165562914 479% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 13.0662251656 191% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1031614338 49.2860985944 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.84 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.96 7.06452816374 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 4.19205298013 310% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 4.33554083885 254% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271325718416 0.272083759551 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803058020361 0.0996497079465 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794744071133 0.0662205650399 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165860672673 0.162205337803 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638336299388 0.0443174109184 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.3589403974 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 12.2367328918 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.42419426049 87% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 63.6247240618 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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