Q9 : As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do you think the advantage of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?
Recently, whether an increase in the number of cars is beneficial has become the subject of heated debate. Some people assert that although there are some disadvantages to making use of cars for the environment, these are outweighed by the advantages for individual people, while others argue otherwise. Personally, I wholeheartedly agree with the former stance. In the following essay, both views will be discussed before a conclusion is reached with my opinion.
On the one hand, those who claim that a rise in the number of personal vehicles poses a threat to the environment do so for several reasons. Proponents of this argument insist that a huge amount of CO2 released by cars exerts a detrimental influence on the quality of air. In other words, excessive use of cars gives rise to air pollution preventing living creatures, including human beings as well as plants, from living a better life. Furthermore, a multitude of endangered species of wildlife that should be protected in order to keep biodiversity can become extinct considering that a large quantity of carbon dioxide accelerates the speed of global warming causing harm to wildlife, which can even lead to climate change.
My opinion, however, is that mankind can reap a myriad of advantages from the availability of private vehicles. Perhaps the most compelling reason is that owning a car facilitates various aspects of people's daily life, from taking trips to commuting to and from work. To be more specific, making use of cars enables employees to travel to their workplace with greater ease given that they do not dedicate a great deal of time to commuting, unlike passengers of public transport. This is because public transport systems are sometimes not only unavailable but also crowded. In addition, individuals' cars can minimise their inconvenience during their travel as they do not need to take into account problems related to public transport, such as being limited to fixed routes and timetables. In light of the above, I find these more persausive.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that there are a variety of opinions about this topic. However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that the benefits of utilising personal vehicles for everyday people surpass the drawbacks for the environment for the reasons discussed above.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 66, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ease in the number of cars is beneficial has become the subject of heated debate....
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...bove, I find these more persausive. In conclusion, it is undeniable that there...
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Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that the bene...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.15609756098 380% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 5.60731707317 499% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 33.7804878049 192% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 965.302439024 205% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 383.0 196.424390244 195% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16449086162 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 3.73543355544 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86429759697 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 106.607317073 219% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608355091384 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 283.868780488 225% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 1.53170731707 522% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 3.36585365854 297% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6432517746 43.030603864 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.625 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9375 22.9334400587 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 5.23603664747 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287908320217 0.215688989381 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737002745203 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713987343297 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157978200533 0.15604864568 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397805238652 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 61.2550243902 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.06136585366 120% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 40.7170731707 292% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 66, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ease in the number of cars is beneficial has become the subject of heated debate....
^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...bove, I find these more persausive. In conclusion, it is undeniable that there...
^^
Line 7, column 127, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a careful manner" with adverb for "careful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... However, after considering this matter in a careful manner, I fully support the view that the bene...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 3.15609756098 380% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 5.60731707317 499% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 33.7804878049 192% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 965.302439024 205% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 383.0 196.424390244 195% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16449086162 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 3.73543355544 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86429759697 2.65546596893 108% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 106.607317073 219% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608355091384 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 283.868780488 225% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 1.53170731707 522% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 3.36585365854 297% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6432517746 43.030603864 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.625 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9375 22.9334400587 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3125 5.23603664747 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287908320217 0.215688989381 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0737002745203 0.103423049105 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713987343297 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157978200533 0.15604864568 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397805238652 0.0819641961636 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 61.2550243902 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.68 8.06136585366 120% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 40.7170731707 292% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.