You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
You should write at least 254 words.
The length of people's life is increased due to modern science and lifestyle. So, many corporations are contemplating if they should raise the retiring age of the employees as well. As I am against the mentioned idea, the essay will describe the reasons behind it.
Firstly, if we consider the said notion, the unemployment rate will increase. The modern medicine has not only updated the life expectancy of human beings but also has lowered the rate of infant mortality. This means the number of young people has increased as well as the number of old people. Now, the longer the old generation remains employed, the young generation would have to remain unemployed, unless, they become self-employed or new businesses emerges.
Secondly, the older the employees are, the less efficient they become. The people in their sixties do not have the capability to learn to use modern technologies. Moreover, people become more prone to sicknesses as the become older. Working while sitting or standing for too long may cause bone diseases in them. They also can not handle the work stress like they use to anymore. These drawbacks sufficiently limits their work efficiency.
Finally, most workers have given their youth to the organisations they work for. They deserve rest and quite time so that they can catch up with the world in their own pace without the pressure of working.
To conclude, instead of raising the retiring age, the corporations should lower it in order to give chance to the young generations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1270.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05976095618 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67718411853 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.625498007968 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 389.7 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.8670849541 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.375 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6875 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123745710465 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405703069412 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473021839414 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0761393298566 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468570812087 0.056905535591 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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