the increase in people's life expectancy means that they have to work order to face for their retirement one alternative is that people start to work at a young Graves in this alternative a positive or negative development.
In contemporary era, life expectancy has become a concerning matter for human after their retirement. While, when individual start work at a young age. In my own perspective, I have a mixed view on this statement
To commence with, working in young age are extremely beneficial for every individual. First and foremost, it increase awareness as well as knowledge of alternative. apart from that people learn how to manage their time according to their work. when we get a new job already it was confidence and also people motivated by job, due to fact that, alternative gain experience when doing job as a part time. For intance, a student who study in college as well as the universities if he started a part time job after his study then he gain more experience rather than other and he inspired from the job because he known about the value of money as well as time. One main advantage is alternative become a hard working.
On the other hand, in part time job, also has a negative development. Firstly, over work with study also like a burden, in case individual feel financial burden on their shoulders, Sometimes, they feel stress when they do all time work. second alternative do not gain awareness, as compared with who complete their academic properly. As a result, they do not get good jobs.To explain, these kind of people obtain jobs such as waiters, ticket checker, accountant as well as a give when the customer services extra. In this way, people do not achieve their goal and demands with high accuracy.
To conclude, I believe that, this statement has a both positive and negative development according to the person that how they choose the way of work.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, so, then, well, while, apart from, kind of, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77586206897 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68303562084 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579310344828 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5402601728 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9285714286 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21428571429 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307450515003 0.244688304435 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106339858801 0.084324248473 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556238130169 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19037482942 0.151304729494 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0233002900728 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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