In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Over the last few decades, people have had various breakthroughs in technology to produce essential products for humans without affecting environmental resources, especially animals. While several individuals claim that there is no need for humans to create food, clothing, or medicine from animals, there are a variety of reasons for me to believe this idea.
On the one hand, it is justifiable for some people to claim that animals can not be replaced by other things. One of the most noticeable signs is that animals play an essential role in various fields such as food, clothing, and medicine,... To be more specific, although there are a majority of breakthroughs in technology, we can not find alternative solutions for testing medicines, practice surgeries,... without laboratory animals like mice, rabbits, and so on. Moreover, animals provide a massive amount of food which contain high levels of protein, nutrients,... as well as are compulsory materials to produce some products such as medicines, clothes,...
On the other hand, there are numerous valid reasons to encourage this idea that we can produce many products without using animals. One of the most striking catalysts is an abundance of benefits to use the alternative products from nature as well as protect the animal, especially wild ones from their extinction as the overuse of humans. For example, every year, thousands of rare animals are killed, namely tigers, crocodiles, elephants,... to produce coats, accessories for the fashion industry. Also undeniably, people who have a vegetable diet can be healthier than others who have an animal-based diet. Besides, vegetables can prevent many diseases such as heart attack, cancer, stroke,... Those problems are partly caused by using animal foods that have high cholesterol levels. Instead, people can use some plants containing high protein for food like mushrooms, beans,...
In conclusion, with some worth considering reasons mentioned above, I believe that we can no longer use the products made by killing animals such as food, clothing, and medicine,... due to that they can be replaced by alternative ones like vegetable foods, artificial cloth,...
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, moreover, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1853.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 341.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43401759531 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92493732971 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554252199413 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2959953099 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.944444444 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9444444444 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181833407315 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611122432751 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449474392775 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122144454948 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0122193679272 0.056905535591 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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