Nowadays in many countries more and more people are spending their time away from their families. Why is this? What are the effects on themselves and on their families?
Never has people been so drifted apart from their families as it is recently. In this essay, I am going to give some feasible reasons of this problem as well as certain impacts of it on individuals and their families
In fact, there are two prominent factors related to work and entertainment that evoke people to spend more time outside. As the world is getting increasingly hectic and so is people’s ambition for promotion and success, a host of individuals are willing to sacrifice moments with their loved ones to be indulged in work. For instance, a lot of workers choose to burn the midnight oil because they want to make a good impression on their bosses. Interestingly, that leads to another reason, that because people are so stressed out due to their everyday tasks, different kinds of entertainment facilities such as karaoke, restaurants, bars,… have been erected. And since most of them are immensely amusing, a lot of people dedicated more time in those places for enjoyment and relaxation
Regarding its influence, both pros and cons are witnessed in this trend. In detail, individuals can gain profits while spending time outdoor, learning and observing new things in their society. Consequently, it helps them to open up their mind, receive more hands-on experiences and strengthen their confidence. However, the phenomenon has an obvious setback for their families when it definitely loosens the bond between every family member. And as people are gradually spending less time at home, there would be a certain distance between them and their families, making it hard to confide everything or simply feel the love and comfort in their own house
To conclude, it is true that nowadays so many individuals dedicate most of the day being out of their houses, as they are occupied with their careers or they are appealed by the outdoor amusement facilities. Nonetheless, the effects on each person and their families can be diverse, therefore, people need to carefully take it into consideration
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the love and comfort in their own house To conclude, it is true that nowadays so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, nonetheless, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, while, apart from, for instance, in fact, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09939759036 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7940948114 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596385542169 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.0337182277 49.4020404114 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.909090909 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1818181818 20.7667163134 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.7272727273 7.06120827912 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.451454290711 0.244688304435 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170679118435 0.084324248473 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713235943472 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277265428708 0.151304729494 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055074343594 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 638, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , …
...ities such as karaoke, restaurants, bars,… have been erected. And since most of th...
^^
Line 3, column 786, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hose places for enjoyment and relaxation Regarding its influence, both pros and c...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 658, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the love and comfort in their own house To conclude, it is true that nowadays so...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, nonetheless, regarding, so, then, therefore, well, while, apart from, for instance, in fact, such as, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09939759036 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7940948114 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596385542169 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.0337182277 49.4020404114 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.909090909 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1818181818 20.7667163134 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.7272727273 7.06120827912 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.451454290711 0.244688304435 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170679118435 0.084324248473 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0713235943472 0.0667982634062 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277265428708 0.151304729494 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055074343594 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.