Some people think that outdoor activities bring beneficial for children’s development than playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is widely supposed that children should participate in exterior activities instead of joining in some online games and staying at home. While I think computer games have some interesting effects, I hold the view that it would be better to attend outdoor activities.
To begin with, playing online games also brings about some foreseeable benefits. Firstly, due to having a chance to have access digital gadgets at an early age, children are allowed to develop their skills and abilities in terms of technology. This helps them adapt to the innovation of the whole world in terms of computer, designing, and programming which might have a huge meaning to their future career paths. Secondly, some computer games are also produced in order to help these individuals accumulate their creativity, talents as well as entertain themselves at the same time. As a result, navigating their hobbies helps them have a better entertainment for their mental development. For instance, my niece could program a basic game thanks to a habit of playing a gripping game on the Internet and also relaxing after learning at school.
However, I believe that outdoor programs would be a better option for children’s growth. The initial reason is that because of being able to interact with many other people, children might improve their interpersonal skills such as communication, problem-solving skills. By contrast, keeping their eyes constantly on the screen of smartphones, ipads, or laptops would jeopardize their growth in both physically and mentally. For example, the fear of staying in crowded public places could not be seen in children spending time playing some competitive sports such as basketball or football. This means children who could contact with the outside world be able to solve their problems, be brave to take risks and dare to produce groundbreaking ideas in their future.
In conclusion, while some merits of computer games have been aforementioned above, I still believe that outdoor programs would create extraordinary values for children’s development.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 742, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean '(thanks)'?
Suggestion: (thanks)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1754.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34756097561 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89528221966 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588414634146 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.380392152 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.285714286 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2142857143 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212944800525 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0837890987787 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598021240693 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152527737298 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444197891645 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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