How to stop birds from being harmed when they try to fly through glass windows is the focus of both the writer and the professor. In the writing, three solutions, including using one-way glass, painting colorful designs and creating magnetic field, have been elaborated. The professor, however, claims that none of those solutions are effective,
As opposed to the writer's idea that replacing the regular glass with one-way glass that is transparent in one direction will make birds understand that the glass forms a solid barrier, the professor states that one-way glass will reflect items like a mirror, which is as bad as the regular glass. He advances the theory by saying that birds will think the reflections of trees are real, so they will still fly through them.
The professor continues to discredit the writing's assertion that painting colorful designs on regular windows will make birds avoid flying through the glass, and people will still be able to see through the openings where there is no paint, by examining the fact that birds will perceive the openings as open holes of the building so they will still try to fly through it. In detail, he points out that people will have to make the holes extremely small and thus rooms inside will be dark, so it has problems with the solution.
It is the professor's third argument that birds' ability to determine directions does not work when they fly within a city, which contradicts the writer's view that creating an artificial magnetic field helps to guide birds away from buildings. To explore deeper, the professor contends that birds' eyes and the brightness of light will make them decide where to go when birds travel long distances from a cold countries to a warm one.
- Do you agree or disagree Two people can still become good friends if one of them has more money than the other one does 70
- Do you agree or disagree It is easier for parents to raise children than it was 50 years ago 73
- TPO48 Integrated Writing 85
- Participating in organizations and clubs is as important as academic studies for students 80
- TOEFL T P O 42 Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 19, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ons are effective, As opposed to the writers idea that replacing the regular glass w...
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Line 5, column 42, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writings'' or 'writing's'?
Suggestion: writings'; writing's
...he professor continues to discredit the writings assertion that painting colorful design...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 408, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'country'?
Suggestion: country
...birds travel long distances from a cold countries to a warm one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, still, third, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 30.3222958057 122% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1373.03311258 106% => OK
No of words: 295.0 270.72406181 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91186440678 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37256656508 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535593220339 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 419.366225166 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 21.2450331126 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.4306644491 49.2860985944 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 181.125 110.228320801 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.875 21.698381199 170% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.375 7.06452816374 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00930042022984 0.272083759551 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00340811378054 0.0996497079465 3% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.00901702150313 0.0662205650399 14% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00532181600405 0.162205337803 3% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00921765570755 0.0443174109184 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 13.3589403974 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.86 53.8541721854 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.0289183223 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.79 12.2367328918 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.7273730684 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.498013245 156% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.2008830022 152% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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