Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than other people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think It is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Professional athletes receive higher salaries than other occupations. This is not fair, especially for teachers, because of advancing education in a nation, while the former professionals only entertain citizens.
Salaries of sport professionals are more than that of teaching jobs due to the sponsorship. This is because, investing on sport games is a lucrative business for companies to have quicker money, impacting the money received by athletes accounting for thousands of dollars, compared to that by teachers only at dozens of that depending on government funds . For instance, in Indonesia, PT. Sampoerna sponsors Persik FC because of the profits from merchandises and tickets about $2 million in a match season, and the football players are paid for 2000 dollar per individual per season, while secondary school teachers merely are regulated to have $120 per year from authorities.
Nevertheless, income of educators should be higher fairly because of the immense impact than that of sport ones solely entertaining people. That is to say, educating youngsters can effect on the country development, resulting the best generation mastering in particular fields. For example, Finland assigns the primary school teachers as the highest gaining job as a reason that they have credited to educate schoolers 6-to-12-aged pupils, impacting the country to advance in special areas, such as well-known basketball players. Therefore, those children have been already prepared by the government to promote the country throughout the international basket competition.
In conclusion, teachers’ salaries should be higher fairly, due to the dedication in country education, contrasting to sport professionals, working for entertainment. If government does not solve this issue, the education development will perhaps delay.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, such as, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.76579925651 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12163344038 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624535315985 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.3171380199 49.4020404114 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.25 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4166666667 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1666666667 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102043622401 0.244688304435 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445933119078 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500182239863 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0704950225674 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496647057404 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.0946893788 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.48 12.4159519038 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.42 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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