it is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
A school of thought holds that young students should prioritize studying history of their own country rather than that of the world. I disagree with this notion for the reasons outlined below.
To begin with, it is understandable why some people put heavy emphasis on children learning about local history. Specifically, cultivating local historical legacies has never been inadequate, which lays foundations for further development of their country. Notwithstanding, this thinking is being unsuitable in the modern context which dedicates to rapid globalization, compared to the past, when cultural exchange was underestimated and interactions were confined to those who are of the same race and ethnicity. In case of having a good grasp of foreign countries' history, young citizens are likely to find it easier to respect cultural differences, which are the key to mutual understanding and cooperation among nations. Hence, It is sensible the schools should embed world history into their curriculum.
In addition to fostering an appreciation for cultural diversity, teaching schoolchildren about events which took place in other parts of the world can give them a more accurate and fair outlook on the history. In contrast, learning exclusively about nation history instill on individual a biased and negative feelings about people from other countries. For example, Vietnamese educational programs for students mostly describe the Vietnam war as a defense of Vietcong against extraterrestrial armies such as the US or France, which may mislead children that people from these countries are bad.
To brief, I would argue that leaning world history offers far more enormous benefits for schoolers rather than counterpart which focuses on national history.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 557, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
... case of having a good grasp of foreign countries history, young citizens are likely to f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, look, may, so, still, for example, in addition, in contrast, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60074626866 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03116240633 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65671641791 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6740376353 49.4020404114 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.454545455 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3636363636 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.54545454545 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257890730653 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947063660735 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594448465329 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16250764553 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0328271644725 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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